神秘内容 Loading...

  4. 我在山坡的小屋里,悄悄掀起窗帘,窥见园中大千世界,一片繁华,自己的哥姐,堂表弟兄,也穿插其间,个个喜气洋洋。 (来源:英语杂志 http://www.EnglishCN.com)

  学译: I stayed in the small flat on the hillside, quietly opened the curtain, caught glimpse of the world in the garden, it was so flourishing: my brothers and sisters, male cousins, were coming and going through, everyone looked pleasant.

  学译:In the small cottage on the hillside, secretly I opened the curtain to see the prosperity of the big world in the garden. All of them were delighted, including my brothers, my sisters, and my cousins.

  参考译文:I, without being noticed, lifted the curtain in my small room, only to spy the bustle of a kaleidoscopic world down in the garden, and my elder sisters, brothers and my cousins, each full of the joys of spring, were shuttling among the guests.

  汉语原句的“节数”有了空前的增加:八节。面对如此长的“竹竿句”,“学译”显得有点“技穷”,无奈之下,以上两句“学译”便依样画葫芦,照汉语原文的感觉走,见一句就译一句,不考虑“节”间关系,不分析时间先后和逻辑内涵。第二句 “学译”甚至没有弄清“自己的哥姐,堂表弟兄”和“个个喜气洋洋”之间的关系,不明白“个个喜气洋洋”指的就是“自己的哥姐,堂表弟兄”,而错把All of them were delighted当作“主干”,而把my brothers, my sisters, and my cousins用including作为其中包含的成员处理。

  复观参考译文,发现译者在落下译笔之前,对原句的逻辑梳理,非常到位,因此,确定“主干”,也极为果断。“悄悄掀起窗帘”、“也穿插其间”分别作了“主干”,英译就站稳了脚跟。特别值得一提的是,译者在第一个“主干” (lifted the curtain in my small room)之后,用了一个动词不定式短语,表示结果,在这个动词不定式短语前添加了一个副词only,译文顿时生色!这说明,除了经过逻辑分析确定“主干”之外,能活用所掌握的词汇,也极为重要。我们初学英语之时,就已经学到:only to是一个很有感情色彩的表达,其含义是:不料竟会……;没想到会……。

  5. 一霎时,一阵被人摒弃,为世所遗的悲愤兜上心头,禁不住痛哭起来。

  学译:It was so quick that I felt being deserted by people and by the whole world, bursting into tears.

  学译:I couldn't help crying bitter, with a feeing of being abandoned by others flooded in my heart at that moment.

  参考译文:Quickly enough, I was thrown into a fist of sorrowful anger at being forgotten and discarded by the rest and could not help crying my heart out.

  汉语原句的“节数”有四节。若对句中的最后两节略作分析,不难发现“悲愤兜上心头”和“禁不住痛哭起来”之间是一种先后关系,也略带因果关系,但总的来说,两个短语所占分量大致相同所以处理时,以使用并列句为好,没有必要强调主次。“学译”分别把“悲愤兜上心头”和 “禁不住痛哭起来”作为主语,另一个短句作为修饰成分,但读起来感觉分句不是太简略就是太冗长。而参考译文的并列处理则摆平了这两个短句,读起来通顺流畅。

  所以,在选定“主干”时,也应当避免形而上学的思维,选择主句的同时,还要深入分析以下句间真正的关系所在,在并列或先后关系的句子中,也不能强行设立一个“主干”,而弄巧成拙。

 
神秘内容 Loading...

你可能对下面的文章也感兴趣:

·专八考试指导:如何提高专八听写成绩
·英美文学选读(美国文学部分)
·综合指导:如何有效来背专四专八单词
·专业考试指导:美国文学简史(一)
·综合:罗马帝国的征服对英语习语的影响
·专业考试指导:美国文学简史(二)
·英语专业八级考试题型分析与应试技巧
·专业考试指导:美国文学简史(三)
·专八英语个人资料中英词汇对照
·专业考试指导:美国文学简史(四)

共2页: 上一页 [1] 2 下一页
上一篇:专八考试指导:如何提高专八听写成绩  
下一篇:英美文学选读(美国文学部分)
[返回顶部] [打印本页] [关闭窗口]